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 STORY TIME :) part one

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PostSubject: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 2:44 am

Before I tell this story I must put out that I am loosely going off of mythology but most of it is made up. I will also note that none of this is true, and I literally came up with it while sitting here thinking about life. Seeing this if something makes no sense then it probably doesn't. I will also say that it is long so if you dont want to sit down and read it DONT. Now onto the story

when I was eleven a white van pulled up next to me while I was checking the mail. The door opened revealing a man wearing mostly white. Automatically I took a disliking to the man. I began to walk away until he said to me
"Do you want a new computer?" in a very calming voice.
In response to the man I simply said "Yes I would like a computer"
This time in a voice that made me want to do anything he asked he said
"I can get you one all you have to do is one simple thing"
I was unsure of how to respond to this So I said
"what is it?"
A grin formed on his face and he said
"just a simple thing in 4 years nothing bad"
This is the part I hate to tell and regret to no end. I said to him "A simple thing in 4 years... for a computer?"
he said very kindly "yes my dear boy in 4 years"
I became overwhelmed almost as if if I said no I would throw up. I began to feel as if I was in a dream. I could not think clearly my vision felt foggy. I dont know what came over me but I said "okay I agree" The three words that I would regret for the rest of my life, even after life.
I did indeed get a new computer and A really good one at that one that explaining to my parents was nearly impossible. For the next four years I spent my nights wondering what it was that he wanted.
Four years had passed and nothing appeared to happen. I thought that maybe It was wrong. Maybe it was fake, or that he forgot. I was dead wrong literately. The day before it turned 2016 I went to bed feeling relaxed and happy. I had a dream that night of the same man but this time he was different. He had wings, im not talking evil demon wings or bat wings I am talking the alluring feathery wings that most picture angles having. What I also noticed was that this time his eyes were completely white. Looking into them gave me a feeling of calmness that seemed really out of place. Even with all this the man seemed unnerving. He stared directly into my eyes, smiled and said'
"its so nice that you have grown into a fine young man. It is such a shame that your time has come" His smile faded, his wings spread out, his eyes turned a milky gray. Fear that I have never felt before rushed though me. The dream became fiery instead of the golden that it was. All around me I saw black human figures moving around. The smell nearly knocked me unconscious. It smelled like a farm but 100 times worse. The screaming was the worst part. I felt like my head was about to explode. I could feel my ears bleeding. suddenly everything went silent. the smell was no longer there. but everything around me was the same. The man was slowly walking towards me. He came really close and then grabbed my neck. His hands were freezing cold. He lifted me into the air and looked me dead in the eyes. After being like this for what felt like a year he said
"green eyes, yes yes Lucifer is going to love you, Its such a shame that your gonna be hard to break. I felt as if where his hand was touching my neck was on fire. the pain spread throughout my entire body. He threw me across the field with such force that I could feel it running through my body.
I dont know what I hit all that I know is that when I awoke I was on the floor in a cell. I saw two men standing at the door. One of them was the one that threw me. I felt so much anger towards him I hardly noticed the 2nd one standing next to him. The 2nd one Had a certain blueish color in his eyes. His wings looked as if they were cut with scissors. He had scars running across his face. His hair was a mess and looked like a three year old cut it. The one that I knew turned to the other and said "my lord this one sold his soul 9 years ago as of now we are converting him. He is proving to be difficult...
9 years? How long was I out? What does he mean by difficult?
The one known as Lord started laughing. He said " well no duh, I doubt he even remembers the torture you put the poor boy though" His voice was deep but seemed light hearted. As if he was telling a joke.
The other man in response said "But Lucifer...." however Lucifer cut him off
"Leave me with the boy James, I will speak to you later"
James then said "yes my lord' then gave an evil glare and left.
Lucifer came into the cell and sat on the bed.
He said while laughing a little "well dont just lay there we got things to discuss"

Want more please tell me. I would have finished writing it but it is getting late and I dont know if I should continual writing if I dont know if others will enjoy it. I do however hope you liked it. If you did not like it please be honest. I am not the best writer. Also be nice to me about spelling and grammar I wrote this in 30 minutes.
Until we talk again
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 9:09 am

I really like it Alex, it kept me not wanting to stop reading it, just glad I am reading it during the day with sunlight coming through my bedroom window instead of at night!! Please continue with it.


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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 10:34 am

Please do a part 2 Alex, I want to know what Lucifer tells this person.
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 1:31 pm

Hate it & Love It, at the Same Time...!

Only It Hate 'Cauee I Hate Cliff-Hangers...!

Love It For It's Creativity...! A Nice Mix of Drama & Suspense...!

Guess We'll Just Have To Wait n See How This Mystery Turns Out...!


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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 1:45 pm

Good story line you got going Alex, I really like it, so please, do continue with it.
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 2:23 pm

I like it Alex, it's really kind of eerie in a way, and makes us all think we could wake up in the middle of the night to see someone like that by our bed lo; but then with me, any guy by me bed in the middle of the night would not make me panic, it would make me smile Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 3:13 pm

And after you get thrown across the room?
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 5:09 pm

Quite the intersting story, I am excited  to see where this goes in the next part.
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 5:12 pm

I see my Prince Alex has some writing talent, good start Alex, please keep going.
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PostSubject: Re: STORY TIME :) part one   Sun Mar 06, 2016 9:35 pm

Okay people I will get you a part two just dont kill me. i will have it up ASAP
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